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My first visual poem, forgive it's simplicity.
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*MabusTheDark Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Quite a nice poem, and the spiral only makes it better. ^^
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*Everlasting90 Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful and fun to read. I like the way you presented it!
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*roselynedwards Jan 26, 2013  Student Writer
Wow I'm impressed, it's very elegant and the word picture is well portrayed.
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Gorgeous!!! The simplicity is part of what drew me in...
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~tommyboywood Jan 16, 2013  Professional Writer
unique and cool
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The words are beautifully written; it would still be just as lovely as a traditional poem. That being said, I love the spiral. Nice job!
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It is simple but there is a beauty to it :heart:
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~VicariouSoul Jan 16, 2013  Professional Writer
This reminds me of something similar I did long ago [link]

Although your version (this spiral) doesn't directly relate to what you're talking about, it is still neat. However, there seems to be a common misconception when you categorized your poem as 'Visual & Found Poetry.' What you have here is visual, but it's not visual within 'Found Poetry.' It is a 'Concrete Poem' via a visual/design made completely out of text to relate to what you are talking about. That's the challenge of a Concrete Poem, and I cannot really say this one overcame the challenge. However, it did achieve a story, even if it is a common one, then again, not exactly in the way it was told in some areas. Perhaps it's not the poem but the title itself could have used a touch of mysteriousness than a title that sums everything up in a single line.

I think the most stunning and original bit of this poem is the beginning, Quote, "The sunlight pours through the leaves high above me." End of quote. It is a simplistic line when read or said aloud, but required some deeper thinking than usual on how to word it in such way. A deep-thought quality is something I look for in the written word and it seems you ran with it.

Anyway, continue with your writing and don't let up. You'll only get better.
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~BlazingMalice Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love this. Very well written and displayed amazingly.
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=wdnest Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful - I started reading the wrong way - but soon figured it out.
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